Showing posts with label Week 6. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Week 6. Show all posts

Thursday, February 23, 2017

Storytelling, Week 6: Wishful Consequences



(Wishing Fountain.  Flickr.)

In a small village in Laos, there lived a man by the name of Cain, whom most call Ai Cain with 'Ai' meaning big brother, because he was the oldest of all those that worked as a bull and cattle herder.  Laos is considered to have tropical weather year-round and winter considered as monsoon season.  Because of the tropical weather, it can get quite hot in the summer, to the point of scorching hot.

Ai Cain was okay with his position, but hated the heat very much.  He hated it so much that he wished he could be a cow, because they live so leisurely and travel with whomever takes them.  They also don’t seem so bothered by the heat.  Ai Cain spoke of this to a worker of his and he happened to know someone who could fulfill his wish.  This person was the village’s lady shaman that lived in a hut-like home.

Ai Cain had gone to visit her beyond the village travelling by foot in the scorching hot weather and was even surer of wanting this transformation.  Nearing her home, he sees a short, little lady standing by the open door.  She had been waiting for him to arrive.  He asked her to change him into a cow for he wanted to live a simple life.  She scrunched her brows, looking concerned; she mentioned that there would be consequences.  He didn’t care for such as he didn’t believe in karma or fate.

Without hesitation, she brought him to her backyard and there she built a fire.  Ai Cain, as curious as he was, wondered why she created a fire when it was already hot.  She pressed her index finger to her lips, while closing her eyes.  She then pressed her hands together in the form of prayer hands, standing tall and still.  She reaches to her back pocket where she kept some herbs, knowing she would perform the ritual and grabs a handful dousing it into the fire and begins her chant.  Letting the fire burnout on its own in order for the transition to take place, Ai Cain passes out. 

He awakens the next day in the village next to his cart. He stands, confused, looking down and behind him; he sees hooves rather than hands and feet as well as a furry back and a tail.  He wants to scream for joy, but can’t and instead he snorts a few snorts of glee. 

Ai Cain notices that he is attached to his cart, not free to move.  His worker that helped him find the shaman has also taken his place in leading the herd.  They begin to move and herd the cattle and bulls.  As this occurs, Ai Cain’s worker whips him to move faster.  Though furious, there is nothing he can do.  They arrive at a stop and his worker feeds him some grass and water, not knowing that he is Ai Cain himself.  Ai Cain, hurt from the whippings, is still hot from the sun as well but after drinking his water, he realizes that this was his consequence.  Rather than living as a cow for the rest of his life, he decides that he wants to become the ocean.  He prays to be the ocean and hopes the shaman heads his prayer. 

Sensing his prayer, the shaman knew he would regret being a cow and helps him in his transition to become the ocean.  She walks out to her yard and does the same ritual as before. The transformation is a process and so he must endure the rest of his day as a cow.  Arriving in a town near his village, unsure whether his wish was granted he falls asleep waiting for the next day.

It arrives and as he awakens, he feels a cool breeze and his body moving as a current beneath the sun.  He is the ocean!  Feeling blessed, he feels as if there will be nothing wrong from hereon.  
Enjoying the breeze he begins to feel the fish swimming within him and he notices a boat riding the waves.  He then feels sharp pains as the people try to fish with their sharp rods.  With the unpleasantness of this, he wishes no more to be the ocean.  As night falls, he sees the moon in all its bright, serenity.  He wishes to be the moon and hopes the shaman heads his prayer.

The shaman, growing weary of his wants, she gives him one last chance.  Unbeknownst to him, she changes him with the same ritual, but this time rather than letting the fire burnout, at the end of the ritual, she pours water into the fire to end his cycle.

With all of the turmoil, Ai Cain’s day has ended as the ocean and his soul is immediately transferred to the moon.  Cast out in the night sky, looking down on everyone, he smiles with pure joy that he no longer has to suffer the heat of the day and the torture of those around him.

‘Lo and behold the next day arrives, the sun is out and so is he.  Hiding in the sky, he opens his eyes, feeling a burning sensation.  He looks above him, not very far off the horizon, the sun is still beaming on him.  He can’t escape the sun!  Upset, he prays for the shaman to help him.  As the shaman walks out of her home, looking up she tells him she can no longer help and explains why. 

From then on he must suffer the heat of the sun in the day and lonesome nights above.

Author's Note:  I chose this story of The Man in the Moon, because it resonated with me.  Not only being a story from my parent's country, but just one that teaches all of us that you must suffer the consequences given to you.  The original story is about a man who was a blacksmith and he changed into various forms, because he hated the heat from working as a blacksmith.  In the end he becomes the moon and cannot change back, because he has changed too much.  I tried a different writing style this time around with no dialogue.  I felt this could be better off as a narrative, though it is long and may be a tough read, but I hope it offers a story-telling experience!

Bibliography:  Laos Folk-Lore: The Man in the Moon by Katherine Neville Fleeson.

Tuesday, February 21, 2017

Reading Notes: Why the Lip of the Elephant Droops, Part B


  • Poor man and woman have 12 daughters that they don't love anymore so they try to get away from them
  • The father took them out to hunt; they sat down when they got tired
  • Asked the girls to get water for him with a bamboo joint; they struggled & came back to realize he was gone
  • They figured out their parents didn't want them anymore because the basket they brought was filled with ash & little rice; with no way out, they decided to sleep in the jungle 
  • As they woke up, they found a woman nearby; asked her for help & she offered them a place to stay in exchange to keep her daughter company because she is always gone, of which they accepted
  • They traveled to her home & found a small garden that they could visit, but could not enter when she was gone to the jungle the entire time
  • They didn't enter the garden the first time because she was gone all day, the second time they thought she would be gone all day so they entered the garden and found human bones realizing the woman was a cannibal
  • They fled her home and ran into a cow, asking it for help; the cow opened its mouth & they jump in, when the cow came home, it ran into the woman that asked for the maidens, but it replied no
  • She threatened to kill it if he lied but he pointed a different direction showing where the maidens went; when the woman left so did the maidens
  • As the maidens were fleeing, they ran into an elephant & asked it for help from the cannibal
  • The elephant opened it's mouth & the maidens jumped in but 1 maiden left a garment hang out of the elephant's mouth
  • They ran into the cannibal woman again & she asked if it saw the maidens head towards the city, but he lied & said no; the maiden saw the garment & cursed the elephant to have a drooping lip much like the garment, forever.
(Smiling Elephant and family.  Pixabay.)

This is a tough story to recreate.  Rather than there being 12 daughters, there can be about 3-5 daughters because the parents tried for a son but couldn't get any.  Set in modern day, the parents are ready to send their kids off to college, not abandoning them.  In a sense, the kids can abandon the parents.

The woman will not be a cannibal, but a woman who is doing research on random strangers.  She owns a zoo, so she tricks some people that she chooses to keep.

The girls happen to go on a zoo trip for class, a couple of them in the same course & the others just meet up with them.  They happen to go searching around the zoo, being nosy & find another girl (supposedly her daughter) but she is trapped.

Maybe they get caught & try to escape...but how to incorporate the elephant's lips drooping.  Quite possibly each animal can talk.  Two sisters can understand animals vs the other sisters having different powers.  That is if we incorporate powers because the elephant must talk.

If the elephant talks and lies then the woman will clamp the lip in order for it to stay drooping.  Much like the face of a dumbfounded elephant.  Punishment for lying, since she doesn't have powers, but only the girls do. 

Bibliography:  Laos Folk-Lore:  Why the Lip of the Elephant Droops by Katherine Neville Fleeson.

Reading Notes: The Man in the Moon, Part A


  • Begins with a Blacksmith
  • Does not want to be one anymore because it's too warm so he wants to be a stone on a mountain because it is cool & the wind blows
  • Powerful man changes him into a stone
  • Stone-cutter appears & takes the blacksmith turned stone because it's what he wanted & starts cutting
  • It hurts so he doesn't want to be a stone anymore, but a stone-cutter.
  • He became a stone-cutter but he got tired & his feet hurt, he whimpered & decided to be a sun instead
  • He changed into the sun, but it's warmer than all the previous things he was before so he asked to be the moon, for it looked cool
  • He became the moon; because the sun still shined on him he was warmer than the sun & asked to go back to being a blacksmith, since that is the best life.
  • The wise-man was tired of him changing so he left him as the moon because that is the last he chose
(Man/mask hidden within the Moon.  Pixabay.)

This was short, but enjoyable.  This is a story of a man who doesn't enjoy what he does and is always changing, not appreciating what he has, so karma reaches it's stopping point where he suffers for the rest of his life.  

I can recreate the jobs for the man and rather than just jobs and objects, he can be animals too. 

There can be more with the wise-man as the wise-man can be God?  Or they can both have powers so he can be his Father or even a homeschool Teacher of all things.  

Rather than leaving him as the moon, there are prices that the wise man offers the young man for changing into each profession or being.  Those prices are such, not being able to speak, not being able to see or even hear.  He will still consider some of the options and learn his lesson through that.

The wise-man reminds me of a dark-one: Rumplestiltskin from "Once Upon A Time."  

Though he is a moon in the end, he can still offer to speak and only show his face whenever he is in the night sky, because the sun is so hot on him, he will sleep in the day.  

He will conjure up magic to try and change him back or cry a song in the night for those to hear him sing.  

He doesn't have to be alone in this, rather than just the wise-man and the blacksmith, he can have a family that he leaves behind.  Or a best friend that tries to talk him out of changing and in the end he helps him go back to being human, but he sacrifices much for his dear friend.  Or it can be a she, because there is an unrequited love as well.

  1. There may be too many elements...starting off with him working at the shop with a friend of his who is his coworker.  They work together rather than for another shop.  He complains and complains, the friend offers him someone they know that can help him change.  Though given the consequences by the friend, he decides to go anyway.
  2. It takes on from there as he changes and changes, other things unravel with his friend as well, seeing/hearing of the changes. 
  3. Battle can ensure for the friend brought him in, he/she will take him out of it...


Bibliography: Laos Folk-Lore: The Man in the Moon by Katherine Neville Fleeson