(A Head. Flickr.)
This should be a narrative - first person? (would give for very intriguing insight on what the man is thinking about his wife); third person would suit well, though could be typical.
- A hardworking man - artist/carpenter/lawyer/businessman|CEO
- wife - stay at home mom/part-time teacher (substitute)/maybe a simple cashier just to make some $$
- two children - both girls, early to mid-teens (13+)
- Rather painting her body/face before going to work, he simply just helps her get ready in the mornings with the kids as a good husband, kisses her on the forehead before leaving. Does a typical routine/ritual and does something to 'mark' her so he's sure she doesn't lie. He may come off as a clingy/overprotective husband
- After taking the kids to school, she would go to 'work' or shopping for groceries or simply just shopping
- In fact she was cheating, so the snake is her affair (metaphor for 'lover' other than husband)
- He noticed a sent on her clothes one night? Or something else is different about her - attitude? jewelry? Sees a text/missed call on her phone?
- He follows her to wherever she states she is going, because at this point he doesn't trust her. It's unlike her to act the way she acts.
- He catches them in the act - how? Through the window of her 'lover's' place. Possibly they go to the grocery store or a cafe to meet and they kiss!
- Not sure I want to keep the killing to give suspense and drama/thriller; maybe he won't confront them about anything. Most likely NO killing.
- I don't think I'll keep cannibalism in the story...a bit much. But after he talks with his wife about what has happened, they discuss divorce and sit the kids down to talk (that could've been the metaphor of feeding his wife to them)?
- Rather than them eating her and a talking head, her parents are having a discussion in front of the kids, arguing and talking about the divorce; OR she sits down with the kids to talk about it and apologize because they understand what's going on since they're old enough.
- The kids decide to run away together from what their mother has done - to the park? Or they don't run away as that could add for a longer story...
- They run away to grandma and grandpa? Somewhere safe.
- Rather than killing him, they learn what happens and that they will be living with their father and they are unhappy with it because they didn't get to decide who they wanted to be with. Well, maybe one kid will be upset, but the other will be okay.
Bilbiography: Tales of the North American Indians: The Rolling Head by Stith Thompson.
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